Essay #8

Cooper Feltes

English 9

Mr. Salsich

November 16, 2010

Eye in the Sky:

What Are “Sublimer Intelligences” Able to See?

             Ever since humans first started to walk the Earth, the horizon has restricted us from easily seeing what lies beyond its barrier. Because of this, we imagined. We imagined what those points of light were in the night sky, and found out; we imagined skyscrapers, and built them; we imagined technology, and made it real. Now, we look upon what we have done and wonder what others, any sort of being that can have an opinion, maybe a “sublimer intelligence(Dickens,183)”, might have to say about it.

             To gain a sense of what is happening around us, humans rely on some sort of “eye in the sky”. Our vision only allows us to see what is around us, and, unless placed at a high vantage point, is limited by the barrier of the horizon. The only things we can know are restricted to the “rays of light [we] analyze(Dickens,183)”. The universe is bursting(FAST) with striking, explosive, vivid(FAST), and colorful figures, yet to be unseen by the human eye. The “eye in the sky” is the only thing that we can rely on to tell us what these things—creations of the universe that wait and wait for something to notice them (appositive)—are. It is debatable whether the human race will ever be able to discover and understand all of these happenings, however many thousands or millions of years it may take to survey the vast distances of the universe. Maybe the "eye in the sky" limits our  view on purpose, barring us from the amazing spectacles that occur outside of our area of concern, or maybe the people who are able to see the colors among and beyond the stars are too ignorant to realize that they aren't the only thing in the universe that matters.

             Today, many people wonder about what "sublimer intelligences" might think about us, or what they are able to see that we can't. When they study the human race, do they see the population of a prospering, flourishing(FAST), and expanding society, or do they see a dull, dwindling, and dying society? Down here from the surface of our home, the answer is debatable, but up there in the heavens of the universe, the answer might be obvious.  We all hope for the best, namely that we are doing the right thing; the "eye in the sky", though, might be trying to tell us different. The superior beings that dwell in the stars may, in the eyes of some, be trying to push us towards a perfect society-- no crime, no hate, no pain or suffering in sight(coordinate cumulative sentence). This effort is futile. The  utopian(FAST) society that "sublimer intelligences" may be trying to steer us towards is reliant on envisioning the outcome of every decision , and making the choice that will benefit the world, but we can't see the future, so the ideal society that the world and the "eye in the sky" dream of will, in the near future, remain a dream. In due time, the superior beings among the stars will achieve their dream. Maybe( purposeful sentence fragment).

          

               For centuries, people have been relying on an “eye in the sky” to see things beyond their view. That same idea has, over time, enlarged itself to influence the lives of its slaves. Not only can that superior being let us see beyond our vision, but we now depend on it to tell us right from wrong. The “sublimer intelligences” that live among the stars may look upon us in joy or dismay(FAST), and in subtle, almost unnoticeable ways, let us know.

Self Assessment

             This essay, I hope, will be the best I have written. Although making sentences clear and understandable was a challenge for me, especially while writing about such a complicated topic, I think that, since I read over the essay multiple times, I tackled this confusing, ongoing problem. I think that I masterfully exhibited my points in this essay, especially in the second paragraph.

Personal Grade: A+