Essay #11
Cooper Feltes
Mr. Salsich
English 8
January 13. 2010
Personality:
A View Upon How Personality is Very Important In my Life and in To Kill a Mockingbird
Throughout the day, the personalities of others effect our own attitude. In To Kill a Mockingbird, Jem's attitude seems to be rubbing off on Scout. His silence has given Scout one less person to talk to, leaving Dill as her only companion. Jem has unknowingly set the mood in chapters 20 and 21 by keeping quiet. However, Dill disturbed the silence by bursting out in tears in the middle of the courtroom. Scout is then persuaded to follow the trends of Dill’s attitude. Dill's sadness infects Scout and unveils her sympathetic side. Meeting Mr Raymond changed their state of mind as well. Mr. Raymond's sudden appearance startled Scout and changed her attitude from sympathetic to a suspicious mindset. They were startled for one, but Scout wasn’t so sure her dad, who wasn't wery fond of Mr. Raymond, would approve of his presence. Throughout the chapters, Scout and other characters have changed to conform to the personality of others.
My personality has changed over the years, and people seem to recognize it. My Mr. Enthusiastic trademark has worn off, yet my peers and I sense another looming attitude: Efficiency. Efficiency is my "middle name" in everything I do. If I can cut off a few minutes from an activity, I am the happiest boy in the world. The thought of inefficiency "grinds my gears". When I comment about a less time consuming, more precise, or more cost effective way of doing things, people take note. In math class one day, for example, I discovered I had finished the homework in class, and the person sitting across from me, who was an excellent math student, hadn't even broken the half-way point. After he commented on my brutal efficiency, he pointed out I sometimes become too efficient. He reminded me of our science worksheet earlier that week. Trying my best to finish before class ended, I completed the assignment in 10 minutes, but when we checked our answers, I got almost half of them wrong, and ended up having to do it over again for homework. I learned my lesson. Efficiency is an equal balance of time, effort, and quality, and before I can acheive it, there must be a balance between all three of these factors. From my point of view, there is always room for improvement. Whether I'm playing a game or doing schoolwork, I am monitoring what level of energy I put in, and the quality of the work. Efficiency is a feature of my personality that rubs off on people, and it makes each day a little happier for people around me.
3 comments:
Cooper,
I enjoyed your first paragraph, but it was kind of unclear to me. I didn't really get the main point. With a little more work i think that could turn into an EXCELLENT paragraph. Your second paragraph, however, is very good. There are a couple mistakes that if you read it over you can catch, but thats about it. Good work!
-dan
Cooper, I agree with Dan's comment about the first paragraph. It's hard to see the exact main point, and therefore the paragraph seems to lack unity. Give that some thought.
Cooper, I like the way you start off the second paragraph. Although both of your paragraphs are great, I think that you should add one more paragraph to sum everything up. I also think that you should make the first paragraph a little more clear, I think I get what you are saying, but this may be confusing to somebody else.
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